Initial Impression: I am missing information on the setting, this is a scene out of a larger story or world, but it is a very layered scene. There's a lot of subtle information here for me, it's conveyed in bite size amounts. It's tidy.

Pacing: The speed at which you introduce visuals, ideas, history, and such is smooth. I am never overwhelmed except when you're describing the physical nature of the characters. It's a mixed bag because I have a hard time visualizing the werefox but I also enjoy the same sensory overload that Samson felt.

Vision: I felt the visuals in the very beginning were slightly confusing. I know my fantasy but without one of those introductory paragraphs about what appearance the wereform takes, it's hard to be subtly clued in. I did know it was sensual, it'd just be difficult for me to sketch these characters in the first couple paragraphs for example. The FEEL of your descriptors is right, just not the clarity.

Originality: Nothing is new under the sun, but there are shades of respite from that truth. This is an interesting take on were-society. The various types of were-creatures are quietly introduced and make me not immediately turn my head off to another sexual werewolf story! The idea of an asian fox which leads to the nickname kitsune which is a nice play on culture is refreshing. So is having a story about a character which seems staunchly in the middle of the pack vs. 2nd or 1st.

Technique: If your writing technique were a seeing eye dog leading my blind self around. I would have felt disoriented and a little scared in the beginning. This story is saved by the pacing and consistent inclusion of clues and informative tidbits. It allowed me to piece together the scene properly on the fly. Characters are introduced properly and given just enough time for me to understand them. Description impart the right emotion and feeling if not always the right visual.

Impact: It's memorable and in the moments I'm reading it, the story comes off as erotic. It's harmed by the initial confusion in the beginning. I feel like if you'd held my hand a bit more in the opening 2 paragraphs about establishing the worlds rules for were-transformations. That my mind would have been free to focus on the story and less on how things work in this world.